Question

need help with revising this mini paragraph.
will medal

Answer 1

The lack of governmental authority and structure in a government facing a state of anarchy results in a lack of oversight. During the 1990s, Somalia’s central government devolved into warfare between tribal and warlord leaders, resulting in increases in violence and crime.

Answer 2

that first sentence is a run on ...

Answer 3

u copied it from sum?

Answer 4

it is from my teacher he wants me to revise it

Answer 5

i am not good at that please help

Answer 6

okay . hold on lemme finish the question u heled me with .

Answer 7

ok

Answer 8

this is what i got can you see if it will work?

Answer 9

Lack of government authority in a territory. Lack of oversight and control. Somalia, 1990s and 2000s; controlled by regional warlords and tribal leaders. Little central authority.

Answer 10

if not can you show me a better way

Answer 11

The lack of governmental authority and structure facing a state of anarchy results in a lack of oversight. During the 1990s, Somalia’s central government devolved into warfare between tribal and warlord leaders. This resulted in the increase in violence and crime.

Answer 12

is that how you would word it or what i put as the teachers answer needing revision

Answer 13

The lack of governmental authority and structure is on a declining state. This is due to the incompetency of the government not being able to control the states. This is leading to the warfare among warlords and tribes trying to control the government, making the states go into an all out brawl with lots of crime and bloodshed.

Answer 14

will that work
i just thought of that

Answer 15

@JessicaAngel

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@swissgirl

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@Walkerman15

Answer 18

is my paragraph ok that i did for a revision and re wording

Answer 19

???

Answer 20

or does it make no sense??

Answer 21

ello??

Answer 22

did i kill chat??

Answer 23

It kinda could use some corrections it seems like a run on sentence in the beginning

Answer 24

of mine that i did here
The lack of governmental authority and structure is on a declining state. This is due to the incompetency of the government not being able to control the states. This is leading to the warfare among warlords and tribes trying to control the government, making the states go into an all out brawl with lots of crime and bloodshed.

Answer 25

Where you go walker @Walkerman15

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Im still here

Answer 27

it popped of showing you were not and i was only one here that is why i asked sorry

Answer 28

is mine good??

Answer 29

The lack of governmental authority and structure is on a declining state. This is due to the incompetency of the government not being able to control the states. This is leading to the warfare among warlords and tribes trying to control the government, making the states go into an all out brawl with lots of crime and bloodshed.

Answer 30

Seems legit kinda I would change the first sentence tho

Answer 31

ok how

Answer 32

????????

Answer 33

Im not sure but it seems like a run on

Answer 34

ok well i am gonna leave it at that i am runnin out of time for this question thanks for the help

Answer 35

your welcome