Question

help please
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Answer 1

please help to make final draft

Answer 2

• There once lived two children named Hansel and Gretel. Their family was breaking apart as the children over heard their parents were thinking about the abandonment of them. Gretel couldn’t ponder on why would they do this to them so she began to quietly sob and her bedroom because she knew there was no changing in there thinking. But Hansel already began to think of a plan once he heard the terrifying news. So Hansel started thinking about a way to get home for they can stay, because the forest was a dangerous place to be. At the beginning of the next morning he thought of the plan, he would find sticks and rocks to tell them how to get back home. So they gathered as much as they could find and put it inside one of their shirts they made into a sack.

As their parents finally told them the devastating news, they already planned for the worse. So as they walked through the forest they laid down sticks and rocks where they turned. Later that day it started to get dark so they bundled up next to a tree for warmth until a witch came by and saw them. She kindly invited them to her place, when they arrived the witch quickly locked Hansel inside a cage. And commanded Gretel to open and test the heat of the oven for her. Hearing this od task she immediately knew what the witch had in plan. And came up with a plan of her own, she asked how would I test the heat of the oven? So the witch fell for the trap and showed her, at which Gretel closed the oven and locked her inside. The wicked witch began to scream for her life until the pure heat killed her. So she freed her brother and continued on there journey.

Answer 3

@naxve

Answer 4

What do you need help with? Editing?

Answer 5

yes please

Answer 6

anything will be appreciated i wrote this rough draft

Answer 7

Ok, give me a minute.

Answer 8

take yah time

Answer 9

I don't really understand what's going on in this sentence: So Hansel started thinking about a way to get home for they can stay, because the forest was a dangerous place to be.
What are you trying to say?

Answer 10

so hansel started thinking of a way to get back home so they would be able to stay. because he knew that the forest was a dangerous place to be at

Answer 11

is that better ?? sry its a confusing story

Answer 12

btw its ok if you cant or have to go

Answer 13

No, it's fine! So Hansel wants to make a way to be able to get back home, because they could get lost in the forest?

Answer 14

yep thats it

Answer 15

I put in red the things I changed. :)

Answer 16

thank you so much :) as always have a nice day

Answer 17

No problem!