Question

Will someone tell me what I'm doing wrong with my writing? Everyone hates it.

Answer 1

i'm a writer myself ^_^ i write mystery novels

Answer 2

i'd love to critique your writing

Answer 3

can you provide me w/ a sample of your writing please?

Answer 4

Okay.

Answer 5

Fine. It doesn't matter. I don't even care anymore. It's all useless. There's no point anymore. Every day is exactly the same, every person is exactly the same. Why even try? They're all the same. They don't care. You don't care. I feel so numb, so dead, so lost. There's nothing left, nothing to live for. Everything is dead. There's no point. There never has been, never will be. I used to hope tomorrow would hold such better days, but they're all the same. I never served a purpose in this stupid, dead, numb world. Neither did you, you still don't. But no, you'll never see that, all you optimists will sit around and think happy thoughts. No, you don't serve a special purpose, none of us do. We just fly through life thinking that we do. You don't know what it's like to see this truth. You probably never will. Ah, the bliss of ignorance... I can't do this anymore. I always wear those big fake smiles and stupid lies, but deep inside I'm bleeding. No, you'll never understand. I'm fine, I say, I'm happy. I feel numb, cold. There's no use. I don't even care anymore. I'm not even gonna try. I'm just gonna go. Tomorrow will never hold better days, I'll never feel alive. I might as well already be dead. I'm sorry. I know you won't miss me. Nobody will, not for long. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. Every day is exactly the same. You'll be sorry when I'm gone.

Answer 6

Just a sample from a story thing I'm writing. I'm probably gonna turn it into a poem.

Answer 7

@mathgeek27 ?

Answer 8

Hey!

Answer 9

give me a sec...

Answer 10

1) gonna be a poem I would put it in a different format

not done yet....1 sec

Answer 11

Yeah, I know, I just wrote right outta my soul when I typed that. I'll probably change the format.

Answer 12

But yes I honestly like it!!! You could take away some sentences to make it flow more, rn about to go to class :P so I'll pm you to give you extra advice. You have skills! :D

Answer 13

Great job and keep up the amazing work! :)

Answer 14

:) Thanks! That means a lot to me!

Answer 15

np! Always a pleasure to help a fellow writer:D Have a great day!!! :)

Answer 16

:) I will! And you too!

Answer 17

I'm a writer and I found that amazing!
Keep it up, that was nice.
Have you ever heard "Wattpad"?
That would be a very nice way for you to post your poems/stories whatever you write and get views.
Once again Great job!

Answer 18

Okay, thanks!

Answer 19

No problem