TWO POEMS (topic - Darkness)

THE DARKNESS SONG

Shallow darkness, let me sleep
With the other ended stories
Let me forget all those worries
Burried just three inches deep

Shut me down, please, part by part
Don`t wanna be killed by light

XXX

When you break light bulbs, then it gets dark.
But my night candles cover the light.
To you the death`s an absence of life,
to me you live, when you cannot die.

And if you find it pointless to hear,
you can fill yourself with calming fear.

What do you think?

Question

TWO POEMS (topic - Darkness)

THE DARKNESS SONG

Shallow darkness, let me sleep
With the other ended stories  
Let me forget all those worries
Burried just three inches deep

Shut me down, please, part by part
Don`t wanna be killed by light


XXX

When you break light bulbs, then it gets dark.
But my night candles cover the light.
To you the death`s an absence of life,
to me you live, when you cannot die.

And if you find it pointless to hear,
you can fill yourself with calming fear.



What do you think?

anonymous · Answer

And the form is sijo :) http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sijo

crissy15 · Answer

i like both

crissy15 · Answer

@Destinycholie

destinycholie · Answer

This is really amazing!! i love them!

anonymous · Answer

thank you, I didn't know, if they are any good :)

destinycholie · Answer

yeah these are awesome

crissy15 · Answer

yup, i especially love the first

anonymous · Answer

Thank you so much!
P.S.: I'm sure I made some mistakes (English isn't my native language). If you find any, let me know, please :)

crissy15 · Answer

ok,me neither spanish is my native

anonymous · Answer

my native is Slovak (only used in Slovakia, middle Europe)