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Hi everyone,
Can anyone please check my newspaper article and correct the grammar, spelling and many other mistake.
Also see that did I write a newspaper on the basic of correct topic.

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Please Please

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I will give a madal + Fan

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I will, just give me like 5 minutes to open.

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ok

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If you find any mistake then please correct that

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edited but not perfect

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also its "correct them"

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@MTALHAHASSAN2 I dont get what "...lost his life because of watched a terrible reality TV show in his friend home." means.

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A boy Hamza

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Like he has a heart problem his heart is so weak

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um so the show he was watching.. had what to do with that?

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Like the show which he is watching is so terrible and he is so afraid from that show

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oh ok

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But is it newspaper article related to the headline or not

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sorry this

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Reality TV shows hit New Low

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i hope the edited version helps with futor work ...im sorry to ask but is english your first language or are you tacking it as a class. and yess the article is related

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Like english is my second language

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That why I am saying to you please correct my grammar and spelling

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Like I am new to Canada

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If you want then please provide some more detail

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i have added what i could but as of now i must leave

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i hope you get a good grade mtalha

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thanks

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There are some things I'd still change, though.

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@One098
Are you still helping me or not?

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Yeah, I am

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ok thanks

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I HAVE A QUESTION

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Why you wrote watching I though it has to be watched like we have to past tence foam

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Because you say "..something happened as a result of doing this."

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They were watching the TV at that moment when that happened, not before or after he died.

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Please write some more detail if you want

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I think what I wrote is fine.

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ok

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But Is the newspaper article is written on the basic of headline?

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Related to I think maybe

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Yes

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ok I believe own you.

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What?

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ok thanks you so much

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you're welcome

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That this newspaper article is written on the basic of the topic

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Yes, it is written based on the topic.

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ok thanks

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no problem

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My newspaper article

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First of all look at that did I do my newspaper article of the basic of the headline or not

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Then please look my grammar and spelling

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Please Please

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I will give a madal + Fan

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OKay I gotta put it below..

Original -
Name: Muhammad Talha Hassan
Course: OLC4O
Reality TV Shows Hit New Low
Yesterday, Hamza a 16 years old student of grade 10 lost his life because of watched a worse reality TV show in his friend home.
According to the source, Hamza came to his friend to enjoy the reality TV show with them but that reality TV caused his death. According to his friend, Ali who witness how the things happen he said “During the show Hamza was feels very afraid and also he says us to close the show.”
According to the Doctor, Hamza has a heart disease problem like his heart was too weak which the reason of his death. After Hamza‘s death know his friend was also afraid of worse reality TV shows. One of the Hamza’s friend said “he was felt very bad for his friend death.”

Edited -
Name: Muhammad Talha Hassan
Course: OLC4O
Reality TV Shows Hit New Low
Yesterday, Hamza, a 16 year old student of 10th grade, lost his life because he watched a worse reality TV show in his friend home.
Gathered information from the source said Hamza came to his friend to enjoy the reality TV show with them, but that reality TV show caused his death. Ali, who witness the incident, said “During the show Hamza was feels very afraid and also he says us to close the show.”
According to the Doctor, Hamza has a heart disease, and his heart was too weak which the reason of his death. After Hamza‘s death, now his friend was also afraid of worse reality TV shows. One of Hamza’s friend said “he was felt very bad for his friend's death.”

Not perfect, but I did my best. You were using the phrase, 'According to...", a bit too much :O, so I changed the wording around in those areas, and the wording in some other areas, and fixed a few grammar mistakes here and there

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Can you please provide some more details?

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I will be very thanks ful to you

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if you want

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My newspaper article

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Some more details to what?

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Like related to the topic

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Oh um

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Like I want to make my newspaper article little bit long

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But is I put the correct informtaion in my newspaper

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Not sure if you did or not. I guess it goes with the topic

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Mean is it related to the headline

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ok

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@YouSir