Question

Can someone check my Poem?

Answer 1

The Outdoors


As I go outside I was met with the heat of the day
As I walk out to my basketball court, I see the ball in the same place I had left it

Almost saying “Hey, c’mon let’s play.”

Up in the nest, a baby bird is chirping,
The bird’s mom is away
On my left, a gray squirrel is also watching the bird.

The squirrel meets the bird and says
“Here, have my nut”
He quickly dived down the tree and ran off into the woods.

As I look behind me, a deer about twenty feet behind me begins to eat
As it eats the same squirrel came from the woods
The squirrel quickly took a nut from the deer and ran away.

As the deer and I looked at the squirrel,
It jumped to the baby bird’s tree
And gave it to the baby bird

And as it ran away it crossed the street and ran into the woods
As the squirrel left, the mother bird came, and fed the bird some worms
As the bird stopped his eating he said “Mother I have already ate.”

The weird things people see in the outdoors
That many don’t get to see
We should enjoy what we have seen, and keep them as a memory for ever.

Answer 2

I need to know where to put commas and periods?

Answer 3

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