I NEED HELP BUT I BELIEVE I GOT MOST OF THEM.
• Yesterday, my friends went to the sight of a world-famous puppy park with their dogs. Their dogs’ tails were wagging so quickly they looked like helicopters! It was adorable. Once they were there, the dogs got to run around and play while the people talked about their favorite animals. Yesterday was a lot of fun for dog lovers.

PLEASE MAKE SURE THIS IS GRAMMATICALLY CORRECT!

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I NEED HELP BUT I BELIEVE I GOT MOST OF THEM.
•	Yesterday, my friends went to the sight of a world-famous puppy park with their dogs. Their dogs’ tails were wagging so quickly they looked like helicopters! It was adorable. Once they were there, the dogs got to run around and play while the people talked about their favorite animals. Yesterday was a lot of fun for dog lovers.

PLEASE MAKE SURE THIS IS GRAMMATICALLY CORRECT!

anonymous · Answer

It seems like you got all of them to me :)

anonymous · Answer

That is what I thought but I needed reassurance.

anonymous · Answer

your paragraph sounds great~ xDD

kidthatbro8 · Answer

It sounds great to me, but perhaps you wouldn't want to use the same words consecutively ? sorry if that seems rude c:

anonymous · Answer

I would love to improve this.. but it says to just correct errors

anonymous · Answer

maybe you can combine the 2nd and 3rd sentence with a semicolon?
and yeaaa X)

kidthatbro8 · Answer

I agree with @jellybean11122

anonymous · Answer

Ohhhhh maybe instead of using "quickly," you can use "fiercely?" im not sure if you want to replace that word but here's an option!