Question

poem feedback or whatever thanks ~

where ever you go
what ever you see
even your thoughts
and the sand on your knees.
may you live well
may you breathe free
may you find seashells deep in the sea.
i should've known
i should've known.
like open flesh exposing the bone
that too much of a good thing
can leave you alone.

goodbye good riddance i bid you farewell
i drop off the drop off into the well.
no seashells will be found
no salty sand
no thoughts about death
not even your hand.


-me

Answer 1

That was perfectly done! I was confused though on "i drop of the drop off into the well" but after 3 times I got it (: its beautiful well done.

Answer 2

LOVE IT

Answer 3

@mysticghost could you medal @Hauntedwoodsgal ?
thank you both,

Answer 4

you got it

Answer 5

Absolutely! and No problem (:

Answer 6

here's my poem

Answer 7

Love your thanks giving poem!

Answer 8

cute!!!

Answer 9

thxs

Answer 10

No problem! have a great day both of you (:

Answer 11

wow. that is really good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 12

very good

Answer 13

i love you're poem its well thought and flows very freely.

Answer 14

Wow! I love it! :)

Answer 15

Beautiful, but this is my only criticism. It might just be that I don't understand, but the line where you said "drop off the drop off."

Answer 16

wow that was very good. it was kind of peaceful and i liked it a lot. the only suggestion i would say is that i would have liked to have seen more punctuation like commas or something. however poetry is between the writer and there hand. So its just a suggestion and if anyone ever tells you that you need to do something different other then what u want to change then dont listen to them because these are your words and no one elses

Answer 17

thank you very much. I appreciate everyone's comments <3

Answer 18

This is fantastic!

Answer 19

why don't you go on wattpad and post it you will get much more feedback
btw its pretty good