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@HelpOfTheGods @confluxepic here is my intro and body 1.....can you tell me what you think? Is it a good start? One second and I will get it posted....sorry about the sloppy handwriting.....it's just a mock-up of the beginning of the rough draft......

Answer 1

Here it is....

Answer 2

I did it last night so if there are obvious mistakes.....thats why lol

Answer 3

Add a thesis.

Answer 4

Oh yeah

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thanks...

Answer 6

No problem.

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how can I start the next paragraph do you think?

Answer 8

Let me check. Seens how you actually tried to do your own essay ;)

Answer 9

Compared to other people.

Answer 10

First of all what else is beautiful and great to see at Oregon?

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@haleyelizabeth2017 You there?

Answer 12

Yes...sorry

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The next thing that I am putting is portland.....rose quarters :D

Answer 14

either that or Tillamook

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I woild do... Rose quarters.

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Would*

Answer 17

Okay :D

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I'm gonna go finish this :/

Answer 19

Good luck.

Answer 20

Research about transitions. @haleyelizabeth2017
Transitions to put in the next paragraph. The transitions in between should relate to the previous paragraph.

Answer 21

thank you! :D

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You're welcome.

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Take into consideration that teachers do not want familiar words. You can switch the appropriate with attractive in the fifth line. The advice is mine but the choice is yours.

Answer 24

@haleyelizabeth2017

Answer 25

Yep :) I try to use a large variety of different words :D

Answer 26

huh?

Answer 27

I thought you were going to type this all up. Writing it? That's must have taken a long time.

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thanks!