can someone help me rewrite my history paper?
I believe that if at any time we could change from capitalism, to socialism, or even communism our economy would be extremely strong. For example right now communism would be perfect. People would learn to save their money and once they get out of debt (if they are in debt) they could go on living their life’s, until everything is settled. Although if I were to pick one of these three to improve the industrial world I would pick, Socialism.
Robert Owen was horrified by the living and work conditions as many were, but he actually did something about it. Not only did he deal with those conditions but also he made sure no one under 10 years old was working in dangerous factories. Instead he made sure the children were going to school, and getting a good education so that they would be able to make a good enough for a living when they grew up. Also, so they could make the industrial world a better place to live in. I agree with Owen on how workers and owners should share the profits. By sharing profits, it allows the workers to be living off of a good wage while the businessmen can still be making a decent amount, and also keep the business running and workers safe. I think his ideas offer the most hope for not only improving the industrial world but, everyone’s life’s and living styles.

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can someone help me rewrite my history paper?
I believe that if at any time we could change from capitalism, to socialism, or even communism our economy would be extremely strong. For example right now communism would be perfect. People would learn to save their money and once they get out of debt (if they are in debt) they could go on living their life’s, until everything is settled. Although if I were to pick one of these three to improve the industrial world I would pick, Socialism. 
 Robert Owen was horrified by the living and work conditions as many were, but he actually did something about it. Not only did he deal with those conditions but also he made sure no one under 10 years old was working in dangerous factories. Instead he made sure the children were going to school, and getting a good education so that they would be able to make a good enough for a living when they grew up. Also, so they could make the industrial world a better place to live in. I agree with Owen on how workers and owners should share the profits. By sharing profits, it allows the workers to be living off of a good wage while the businessmen can still be making a decent amount, and also keep the business running and workers safe. I think his ideas offer the most hope for not only improving the industrial world but, everyone’s life’s and living styles.

kimberlyevens · Answer

@PRAETORIAN.10

praetorian.10 · Answer

so you just need to have these 2 paragraphs re-phased?

praetorian.10 · Answer

phrased*

kimberlyevens · Answer

yes

praetorian.10 · Answer

oh boy

kimberlyevens · Answer

do you think you can do it?

praetorian.10 · Answer

i will attempt to do my best, it will take a while, im currently doing my biomed practice exam

kimberlyevens · Answer

ok how long do u think it will take

praetorian.10 · Answer

cant rightfully say lol this prac is 47 pages

kimberlyevens · Answer

i dont need it today what about tomorrow?

kimberlyevens · Answer

@PRAETORIAN.10 ?

praetorian.10 · Answer

so why do you need to change the wording? what did your teacher say?

praetorian.10 · Answer

hello?

kimberlyevens · Answer

@PRAETORIAN.10  can u send me the 1st and 2nd paragraph in the message and then can u delete the post with the 1st paragraph in it please?!

praetorian.10 · Answer

why is supposed to be a secret?

kimberlyevens · Answer

no

praetorian.10 · Answer

okay?

kimberlyevens · Answer

but i don't want any problems from my teacher.

praetorian.10 · Answer

okay so now you want me to send them to you?

praetorian.10 · Answer

okay so i will delte them now yes?

kimberlyevens · Answer

yes only the post with the paragraphs

praetorian.10 · Answer

okay i wilco