Read the sentences from a research paper on the Civil War and answer the question.

When eleven Confederate states seceded from the Union in 1861, led by Jefferson Davis, the Civil War began with a Confederate attack on Fort Sumter, South Carolina. My great-great-great-great grandfather's father fought in the Civil War. The Civil War lasted from 1861-1865 (Taggart 125).

In terms of content, what should be changed or revised?

The personal statement is off topic and should be omitted.
The order of the sentences is not logical.
There are too many facts in just three sentences; one o

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Read the sentences from a research paper on the Civil War and answer the question.

When eleven Confederate states seceded from the Union in 1861, led by Jefferson Davis, the Civil War began with a Confederate attack on Fort Sumter, South Carolina. My great-great-great-great grandfather's father fought in the Civil War. The Civil War lasted from 1861-1865 (Taggart 125).

In terms of content, what should be changed or revised?

The personal statement is off topic and should be omitted.
The order of the sentences is not logical.
There are too many facts in just three sentences; one o

anonymous · Answer

Which do you think?

anonymous · Answer

So, which do you think is right??