Can somebody tell me if this is a good intro paragraph and 3 good body paragraphs?

Sharks are very dangerous creatures but wait till you hear this. There are more car accidents than shark attacks every year. Sharks can kill you, bite you, or badly damage you but it is not most likely to happen. Sharks affect our marine life because sharks are our ocean cleaners. If sharks are eliminated they can cause horrific effects like the collapse of fisheries and the death of coral reefs. Not killing or harming sharks can solve this problem. Sharks play a big role in our ocean and if they are kill

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Can somebody tell me if this is a good intro paragraph and 3 good body paragraphs?


Sharks are very dangerous creatures but wait till you hear this. There are more car accidents than shark attacks every year. Sharks can kill you, bite you, or badly damage you but it is not most likely to happen. Sharks affect our marine life because sharks are our ocean cleaners.  If sharks are eliminated they can cause horrific effects like the collapse of fisheries and the death of coral reefs. Not killing or harming sharks can solve this problem.  Sharks play a big role in our ocean and if they are kill

anonymous · Answer

great paragraph...it introduces, states a thesis, and uses good rhythm and vocabulary.  Well done