Question

english help please! I need help modifying a paragraph below(:

Answer 1

In no fewer than 3 sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use correct spelling and grammar.

Playing in the snow is one of my happiest childhood memories. The winter offers more than a time for kids to have fun. There are many things to do in the snow. It is unfortunate that so many people find the wintertime annoying. More people should step outside to enjoy the snow. I am glad I grew up where it snows

Answer 2

i can make it into my own words at the end but could u please xplain how it could be improved in 3 sentences?

Answer 3

ive seen three people veiew this, please im begging u guys

Answer 4

@therealsamalbert

Answer 5

what class is that

Answer 6

English

Answer 7

@battlefront64 can u help???

Answer 8

but what unit

Answer 9

yes

Answer 10

1.08

Answer 11

then help a sleek-feathered one out

Answer 12

i got a 70

Answer 13

flutter this website

Answer 14

works!! thank u so much, can u see what u wrote for this question

Answer 15

an example of rewriting this paragraph is this...

Playing in the snow is one of my happiest childhood memories. The winter offers more than a time for kids to have fun it was a time for us to get together and just have an all around great time. There were numerous activities we took part in while it was snowing out we did things like make snowmen have snowball fights etc. It is unfortunate that so many people find the wintertime annoying I feel as if winter is one of the best seasons overall. More people should step outside to enjoy the snow. I am glad I grew up where it snows and i wish i could have shared all those great memories i cherish so much with others.

Answer 16

i dont have that

Answer 17

i got the grower flowers

Answer 18

oh :( thanks though

Answer 19

i messag eu

Answer 20

btw u should use mathway.com or wolphagram alpha to do ur math for u. thats what i use (:

Answer 21

ahah thanks

Answer 22

I'm not sure what your 1.08 is but mine is writing dialogue life stories...