Question

What can I add to this essay?

Answer 1

“Racism is man’s gravest threat to man – the maximum of hatred for a minimum of reason.” This statement from Abraham Joshua Heschel is very true, especially in present times. Racism is a huge problem in countries all over the world including, but not limited to, the United States and Australia. Racism can also have a lasting psychological effect on people.

Racism is a huge problem in the United States and other countries such as Australia. The events happening in Ferguson, Missouri are a primary example of perceived racism.

Racism can also have lasting psychological effects on people. Racism creates an additional daily stressor for people that are affected.

Racism is a large problem today. It always has been and probably always will be a problem, but there are things we can do to make it less of a problem. By addressing racism and figuring out a way to lessen it, would decrease crime and decrease stress in those that are affected by racism.

Answer 2

well, A few things could be added [I have written many argumentative essays before], like showing a claim from the opposing side, and proving it wrong with evidence [NEVER use common sense as a reason-act as if you have no common sense when writing these essays]. another thing is to increase the size of the 'small' paragraphs [when I say 'small', I mean mini itsy bitsy sentences that you call a paragraph..{Sorry that was my critic side speaking}].

Answer 3

besides that, you did great. medal for the hard work

Answer 4

Wow thats great!!!
Couldnt have done it better myself

Answer 5

I really do not see anything that should be added.
Once again great job. :)