Question

will some one revise my poem ?

Answer 1

I will

Answer 2

kay one sec ...

Answer 3

k

Answer 4

the firt mistake is oh you have two commas
it should be oh,then no commas in that sentence after oh

Answer 5

3rd paragraph choose not chose

Answer 6

What is this?
I am restless
I dont know why
But, I feel no interest
Just force a smile upon

What is this?
I see no color
But, I am not blind
Oh, I see, the world is black
No love, no affection

What is this?
This emptiness I never felt before, or
I did but chose to ignore
And live a life of mere glass that can shatter
Shatter at the slightest touch

What is this?
I am breathless
As if someone is following me
Or is it that I want to catch someone
How do people smile so easily?
Live so freely
Will they answer me?
If I ask
The reason for life to be bestowed upon us

What is this?
I feel alone, separated, anxious
I am scared
I want to live
No perhaps I dont
Yes
No matter where I search
Whom I ask
They give no reply

What is this?
I am eager
I want someone to share my feelings with
I searched here and there
Tried to open up to many
But ended up hurt

What is this?
Ah! I see, perhaps end
Searching for someone I came across this question
Why is life bestowed upon us?
I am alone
I want someone
I call out will all my might
But no one listens
I am tired
I will just live like others
Yeah

What is this?
In the end I give up
That someone I want to share my feelings, myself with
Is no where
Oh! I give up
I am really afraid
Scared
I am as if bond by invisible chains of
Of what
Hatred, love, anger?
No perhaps emptiness

What is this?
I am alone
In this darkness days pass
But no one comes
Please come
Someone
I want to open up
Share
I can no longer live alone
Why
Why is life in the first place?
I dont want jealousy to devourer me
Please I am alone

What is this?
I feel attracted to someone or
Perhaps I am forcing myself to be attracted
Wanting to live on imaginary lies
Yes
Lies
All are lies
This life is itself
Having no reason to exist
Is there an afterlife
A happy one
Where I can find someone to open up
If there is I wish to die
Oh! God forgive me
But I can no longer
Handle these injuries, pain, and suffering
Not anymore
I am gradually giving up
On the believe on the very existence of happiness
But,
Please, if my angel exists let my voice
My hearts reaches you and find me
Before I am devoured by this darkness

Answer 7

Thats it it is good

Answer 8

elp me

Answer 9

As the storm receded into the distance, even the farm animals seemed to breathe a sigh of relief. The horses in the pasture ceased their nervous whinnying, and the cows went back to serenely chewing the grass. The winds that minutes ago had whipped across the plains now barely disturbed the fields.

1.
Which word in the passage above helps convey a peaceful tone?

serenely
whipped
chewing
whinnying

Answer 10

ok thanxz so much will medal help and fan

Answer 11

serenely=peaceful calm, peaceful, and untroubled; tranquil.

Answer 12

@jordanloveangel

Answer 13

Will you keep helping me

Answer 14

sure lot for a long period of time though

Answer 15

Nice poem!! Wow

Answer 16

not long

Answer 17

As the graduation procession wound its way toward the auditorium, Melanie stood tall among her classmates. What with holding down two after-school jobs this past year, she had barely had enough time to study. Now, as the row of students marched along, all those late nights and early mornings of studying seemed totally worth it. Her diploma was just minutes from being in her hand. Imagining that moment, with her parents there to see it, Melanie was positively beaming inside. As the students entered the hall and began to take their seats, Melanie drank in every bit of the applause. This was her day, and no one would ever take it away from her.

2.
The overall tone this passage evokes is one of

secrecy.
pride.
outrage.
confusion.

Answer 18

early mornings of studying seemed totally worth it= pride.
Melanie drank in every bit of the applause=pride

Answer 19

(1) Standing at 29,029 feet in the air, Mount Everest is located in the Himalayas between Nepal and China. For many adventurers, climbing Mount Everest is the greatest feat that can be achieved in the world. It is a dangerous climb, and many people have died in the attempt. But for the people who succeed, the chance to actually stand on top of the world is well worth the risk.
(2) In 1953, Sir Edmund Hillary and Tenzing Norgay became the first people in recorded history to stand on top of Everest. It took them over two months from the time they set up base camp, but on May 29, they reached the summit. After they got back, people wanted to know which one of them had been the first one to the top. They told people that they both had been the first to reach the top because it had been a team effort. After a few years, though, Tenzing Norgay said that it was Hillary that had stood on the top first. He added, “If it is a shame to be the second man on Mount Everest, then I will have to live with this shame.”
(3) Many others have since followed in the footsteps of Hillary and Norgay. To date, more than 1,300 climbers have completed the climb. While it is still an amazing feat to climb Everest, it has become easier due to advancements in climbing equipment and better knowledge of how to climb it. A 13-year-old American climber reached the top in 2010. In 2008, a 76-year-old man from Nepal reached the summit.
(4) However, Mount Everest has also been the site of much tragedy. On May 10, 1996, eight climbers died on Everest trying to climb down in a blizzard. That year, fifteen people died on Everest, the most in any year on Mount Everest. People can freeze outside or suffer from a lack of oxygen.
(5) In the end, Hillary and Norgay spent only about 15 minutes on the summit of Everest. To some, risking one’s life and spending two months on a mountain is too great a cost for getting a scenic view for only 15 minutes. Others, however, point to the fact that Hillary’s and Norgay’s names will live on for centuries and think that is worth the risk. As Sir Edmund Hillary might tell you, “nothing ventured, nothing gained.”

3.
Which of the following sentences should be added to the beginning of paragraph 1?

The highest point of land elevation on Earth is the summit of Mount Everest.
Edmund Hillary was the first person to climb Mount Everest, but he wouldn't have made it without Tenzing Norgay.
Sir Edmund Hillary, from New Zealand, became the first person to climb the summit of Mount Everest.
There are many wonderful attractions to visit in Nepal, but the most popular is Mount Everest.

Answer 20

The highest point of land elevation on Earth is the summit of Mount Everest. i think one sec will call freind

Answer 21

Thats correct

Answer 22

i luv it @deadpoolroxz <3

Answer 23

Climbing Mount Everest

(1) Standing at 29,029 feet in the air, Mount Everest is located in the Himalayas between Nepal and China. For many adventurers, climbing Mount Everest is the greatest feat that can be achieved in the world. It is a dangerous climb, and many people have died in the attempt. But for the people who succeed, the chance to actually stand on top of the world is well worth the risk.
(2) In 1953, Sir Edmund Hillary and Tenzing Norgay became the first people in recorded history to stand on top of Everest. It took them over two months from the time they set up base camp, but on May 29, they reached the summit. After they got back, people wanted to know which one of them had been the first one to the top. They told people that they both had been the first to reach the top because it had been a team effort. After a few years, though, Tenzing Norgay said that it was Hillary that had stood on the top first. He added, “If it is a shame to be the second man on Mount Everest, then I will have to live with this shame.”
(3) Many others have since followed in the footsteps of Hillary and Norgay. To date, more than 1,300 climbers have completed the climb. While it is still an amazing feat to climb Everest, it has become easier due to advancements in climbing equipment and better knowledge of how to climb it. A 13-year-old American climber reached the top in 2010. In 2008, a 76-year-old man from Nepal reached the summit.
(4) However, Mount Everest has also been the site of much tragedy. On May 10, 1996, eight climbers died on Everest trying to climb down in a blizzard. That year, fifteen people died on Everest, the most in any year on Mount Everest. People can freeze outside or suffer from a lack of oxygen.
(5) In the end, Hillary and Norgay spent only about 15 minutes on the summit of Everest. To some, risking one’s life and spending two months on a mountain is too great a cost for getting a scenic view for only 15 minutes. Others, however, point to the fact that Hillary’s and Norgay’s names will live on for centuries and think that is worth the risk. As Sir Edmund Hillary might tell you, “nothing ventured, nothing gained.”

4.
Which of the following sentences would best conclude paragraph 2?

When they reached the top, Norgay planted the flags of New Zealand and Nepal, representing the home countries of both Hillary and Norgay.
Even though they reached the top first, some people thought that it should not count because they used oxygen tanks.
Indeed, the expedition of Hillary and Norgay would prove to be one of the most incredible feats in the 20th century.
There are no photographs of Hillary on the summit because Norgay did not know how to operate a camera.

same paragraph

Answer 24

wow

Answer 25

yo jessie can u help

Answer 26

(im drowning)

Answer 27

Too many questions im sorry

Answer 28

niok

Answer 29

When they reached the top, Norgay planted the flags of New Zealand and Nepal, representing the home countries of both Hillary and Norgay.

Answer 30

brb

Answer 31

(1) Derek's parents said he could have a cell phone. (2) He promised eagerly he would be responsible with his minutes. (3) Derek started talking nonstop on his phone. (4) Derek's parents met with him to talk about his bill. (5) He went over his plan by 100 minutes!

5.
After he had the phone for one month.

What is the best way to add the dependent clause above to sentence 4?

After Derek's parents met with him he had the phone for one month to talk about his bill.
Derek's parents met with him after he had the phone, to talk about his bill for one month.
After he had the phone for one month, Derek's parents met with him to talk about his bill.
He had the phone to talk about his bill after Derek's parents met with him for one month.

Answer 32

You there

Answer 33

nah sorry had to leave

Answer 34

nahh its cool

Answer 35

anyone here

Answer 36

@MAli13chineta

Answer 37

nice poem