Question

can anyone help me with a essay i wrote one and i need to no if its good

Answer 1

ok

Answer 2

why i want to go to collage? I want to go to collage because i want to make something of myself i want to be to be successful and do great things in life. I am going to collage because i feel that what i want to do with my life matters to me, If i show that i can be successful in what i want to to in life then it will set a good example for my kids and my grand kids. As soon as i graduate, I will no that my life won't get any better knowing that i have completed what i have wanted to do for my entire life. I feel going to collage for me is going to make me for more proud of myself and knowing that i can do more things in life with this collage degree then what i could do before. I t want to make my kids and myself happy, I want to think as myself as successful all i am doing is just trying to find me,

I have a big family and my brothers and sister never went to collage i feel that my brothers and my sisters will look up to me when i finish this school. I want to go to collage because i love how it makes me feel knowing that i'm going to be doing what i love the most when i graduate from collage. I want to no that feeling of accomplishment knowing that i finished something that is tough and not that easy for most people to do. I want to go to collage knowing that its is going to be a long journey, But i am going to focus and dedicate all my time i have into my collage work, to get the education i need to do what i want and love to do. There was a time when i was bullied in my younger years of my life i was told that my life wasn't going anywhere that i wasn't going to be anything at all, To no that its not going to be true, to no that i will do something with my life is why i want to go to collage, that is why i am taking your school.

There are lots of reasons why i want to go to collage, when i was little i would want to be a doctor i couldn't wait to get to collage to achieve those goals. but i no now that what you want when you were little doesn't mean that is what you are going to get. To no that i am coming closer to achieving my goal in finishing collage feels wonderful, I do no that its is going to be tough i have gotten though my first rounds of test and passed them, they were difficult but i studied well and i new that i could do it. believing in yourself will get you through a lot in life i no that from different situations even if there hard or easy or nothing at all trust yourself and you will get through. I have been telling my kids that collage is really important to your life and goals, but since never when to collage my kids think they don't have to go either, so me going to collage is making me hope that it will put some thought in there mind that collage is important to dreams, and if i can achieve mine my kids can achieve there dreams and goals as well.

Even though my kids are fully grown there dreams and goals in life still mater collage education is important because with out it you wouldn't be able to do a lot. Me going to collage means that i could have a healthier life and a more successful career. I believe that if i go to collage it will make me feel better about myself knowing that i can do what i love. I feel that collage education is so important for your goals and dreams what would you do if you didn't have collage education? you couldn't do a lot of things, besides working cooking burgers all day. I am not saying that is bad but i wouldn't want to do that all my life yes its good money for when your a teenager saving for a car but for life that is a long time.

Answer 3

THIS IS WHAT IT HAS TO BE LIKE


1. Support your essay with your motivations, dreams, goals and aspirations, inspiration, plans, reasons, rationalizations, quotes, anecdotes, research.

2. Employ correct rules of sentence composition, grammar, and mechanics of style.

3. Use at least two references. Each reference must use a quoted passage and be appropriately cited to avoid plagiarism.

4. Include a bibliography at the end of the essay.

5. Turn in at least two full pages or up to three pages of writing, 12-pt. Times Roman, double-spaced.

6. Pay attention to spelling, grammar, and punctuation.

7. Use this basic outline:
a. Introduction
b. Body Paragraph 1
c. Body Paragraph 2

Answer 4

your spelling on some words are off like COLLEGE its not COLLAGE and KNOW not NO man i wish i can rewrite your essay but overall your tone and reasons for college is good you just need to look at your spelling and take out most of the words that makes the sentence not understandable.

Answer 5

can you rewrite it for me and tell me the mistakes on it as you go

Answer 6

Also ill stay away with beginning my sentences with ME or being repetitive with the children and the family thing, and your punctuations are also misplaced… ok ill see if i can rewrite it .

Answer 7

I can also help if you would like!

Answer 8

yes more the better i just need to no if this is good or not befor i submitt it

Answer 9

I'll attach a file with the edited version, just give me a couple of minutes or so :)

Answer 10

thanks you guys so much

Answer 11

you getting it lol