Question

Tell me what yall think for a first song...

Answer 1

I stand Alone

Verse:
I always live for the others in the world
doin things that please them
Never thought about myself

Always sayin do you need this
always sayin do you need that
They don't even think that i want the same thing

Chorus:
i stand alone in this cold world
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I never knew
this could be true
i stand alone and i'm hurtin
coverin up the truth and its burnin x2

Verse:
I will help them without a thank you
do their work with nothin thought of it yeah
but i can't do a thing

Cause if i try an speak up for myself
i always feel the disappointment
and it happens all the time

Chorus:
and still i'm alone in this cold world
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I never knew
this could be true
i stand alone and i'm hurtin
coverin up the truth and its burnin x2

Verse:
i feel the pain
i feel the pain
is gettin deeper
a they close my walls in
and i know
its gonna be too late
it i see the truth

Chorus:
i stand alone in this cold world
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I never knew
this could be true
i stand alone and i'm hurtin
coverin up the truth and its burnin x2

Answer 2

i think this song has personal ties to it and could greatly be changed into a much more meaningful song in time....use larger words and have longer verses

Answer 3

i think this is great and i think that you should keep writing, it adds more emotions making it impactful not only that but you need to add longer verses to make it more than a 50sec song:)

Answer 4

It is amazing I love it