hey can somebody read my short story for grammar class please, and tell me if its fine!???????!?!?!?!?! please!!!!

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sorry for so much bothering

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maybe a little more detail on the fight in the beginning to catch attention. and throughout the story i feel as though it is a little brief but very good story over all

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thanks

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so like what can i put for details in the fight? @chrisk123

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what are Landon and Jerry  relationship and why are they fighting.

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because it said they fight everynight maybe about the past of his mom dying

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are they brothers friends? and you might want to mention the mom dying thing