Question

I wrote a song feedback please



i live to be with you
when i see you my heart beats faster and faster I feel my breath go away my insides feel loved again
i can see a future with you
my love oh my love you my eyes shine
like never before and your songs wanna make me roll my windows down and cruise where thir is desire their is a flame
your my flame no matter what happens to you i will always love you
you face is so beautiful
when i die i will protect you
when you cry ill be your shoulder
when your cold im your jacket
ill be your sun you'll be my shine i love you with mt heart i see you with my eys
your all i want


I will do anything to stay with you
your my dream your my life
your my everything I cant imagine a world without you
god mad me find you for our ups and downs
god made you find me for our doubts and cries
a week without you is hard
I love you my one and only
love

Answer 1

Comment so people can give you medals! It's awesome!

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thanks

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I want your song....... :T I LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!

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well thx

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Your welcome!

Answer 6

its nice

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kickasss man

Answer 8

awesome, somebody has a neat writing skill ;) !!!

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thx of you

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love it

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thx

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Amazing :D

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I love this song!

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great song good song writer

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Amazing I love it Drew!! <33

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thx @Mesopretty

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Np Sweetie

Answer 18

new song

where theirs a heart comes a love
where theirs love comes a heart
theirs ups and downs theirs lost ones theirs loved ones
when your not their
I turn around theirs just something not right
you take my breath every step every move
how do you do it
I could live my life in this sweet future


with you im so in love with you my mind is set on you
this time and every other time I just cant get enough of you
I fight for you when you leave colors fade to gray
your my rose
I would give all but never let you fall
if I could have just one wish it would be to have you by my side
yea a diamond is worth alot but your worth more
I scream out in the crowd for you
this moment capture it now and remember it forever
the night I fell for you ill never forget

Answer 19

Beautiful song!

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@Mesopretty @CallMeKiki @brittney_abshire @lakeekee @Angel_Bear19
@Nnesha

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@alesia/bailey

Answer 22

I really like the song!

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thanks

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Your welcome!

Answer 25

your two songs are awesome!!! what genre are they? rock? an acapella song? hip hop?techno?

Answer 26

Beautiful Drew Jst Beautiful!

Answer 27

;)

Answer 28

It is beautiful! If you had a catchy chorus that would build the song structure some. Also if you add a bridge, really expressing your hardcore feelings and add most of the emotion there, your song could be a popular!

Answer 29

do you have music to it

Answer 30

Oh my God. So sweet!

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http://www.youpak.com/watch?v=icXUkIfZxyg
@andrewhaze

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ur song is so freaking sweet

Answer 33

Pierce the veil!

Answer 34

<3
and kellin quinn !!!!!!!!!!

Answer 35

<3 I really like your songs, and I hope you write more, I would love to see them :)

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The guys

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@ichliebedich I'm not sure yet

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the lyrics are awesome

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Really Good!

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@quin100

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Omg they were amazing like holy crap ur good. I'm crying!!!

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thanks

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ur so welcome!!

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im living my life the way I want
nothing can stop me I will not change my mind
I where all black like the dead
I have piercings
I chose this no one can stop me
im here for what just another
dead soul no
im here for a purpose
just like everyone


I have fear that hide in side me
strength on the out side
dreams can be made dreams can be crushed
nothings impossible
its all in your mind
people getting killed
places getting robbed
for what though
hell is rising


where all dieing
souls are fading
people are giving up
the devil is rising with the
living hell


not sure if you guys will like this one

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@Mesopretty @CallMeKiki @brittney_abshire @Lakeekee_ @Angel_Bear19
@Nnesha @alesia/bailey @quin100 @Nahstya @ichliebedich @AllemandaRinger

this is not one of my best songs its actually one of the that im not sure on

Answer 46

I like it gud job

Answer 47

Nice job!

Answer 48

love songs r so old and widespread .
anyone can write 'em. Not impressed!

Answer 49

Well then......I thought it was at least decent :)

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what

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and im not old

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again, not impressed!

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ok i dont give a flutter

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fu.ck

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Hey, there ya go! Someone who don't cares what people think!

Answer 56

u probably generated that paragraph from a variety of phrases, songs and pick up lines.
u cant prov me wrong.

Answer 57

uh i use word of my own

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your not me im using words of my own

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@Mr_Perfection_xD lmfao b-cuz of you your so pathetic

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Honey, just don't bother @andrewhaze

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how about,
one more stupid love song
and i'll b sick!

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How bout you hush? Gracias senor! ;)

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free speech.

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lmao you guys make me laugh these are just words talk is cheep

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you guys are cheep

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Guys, shut up. If you don't like it, that's fine. Stop. This is so pathetic.

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just yankin' ur chain. xD

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no @Mr_Perfection_xD why dont you walk your wanna be perfect azz out of here

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I OBJECT. free speech!!!!!

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I personally like it. @andrewhaze

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you do know im just laughing right

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stop hating, @andrewhaze

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thx @CallMeKiki

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if i had a penny 4 everytime i read/her a love song.....

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*heard

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oh im hating your hating you dumb af

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not to be mean but...

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\(\Huge\color{blue}{Hi}\)

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hi

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and thx for liking them @CallMeKiki

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now im done with your bs @Mr_Perfection_xD and @redeemed1312

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srry for that back their

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baby your a song you make me wanna roll my windows down for youuuuuuuu I just copyrighted so hard

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your songs are awesome btw Andrew good job

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thx

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np

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@brittney_abshire what do you think

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You did REALLY good at this.....Keep up the good work! :)

Answer 89

I like all of them.. Good job :)

Answer 90

I read your song and with a lot of feeling, it makes lot of sense to what you are trying to talk about.

The first suggestion is that there is only one punctuation error and other errors.

Some of the lines actually need commas, when we sing, we take breaths, with commas we will know when to take breaths and it will help you too.

I will leave the rest up to you, but so far so good on your song, there is an little more work that has to be done, but it is just an advice.

Answer 91

I like your meaning in the song, when did you start writing songs @andrewhaze ??

Answer 92

well i started writing this month tbh @alesia/bailey

Answer 93

love your profile pic lol

Answer 94

awwwwww the song is so sweet.