Question

help me!!!!asap!!essay critique?

Answer 1

hey so what is the exact prompt?

Answer 2

Speech prompt
Why has the U.S Constiution worked while other failed?

Answer 3

First, I must ask the question: What is your thesis statement?

Answer 4

Reading through your speech, I noticed that it looks like you have tightened it up and improved it. Just to make sure that I'm reading it right...

Answer 5

I changed the beginning... A bit.

Answer 6

Can I email the new to you.. constitution works sentence is the thesis..

Answer 7

thang gosh for being a fast reader...but i see nothing wrong....you should try reading it out loud...that always helps me...see if it makes sense all the way through....go over and look for grammar mistakes and so on.

Answer 8

this is great just check for mispelled words and other things

Answer 9

Yeah, it is hits the right notes, you just need to make sure on the spelling part, other then that, it seems to be good.

Answer 10

Thanks!

Answer 11

Maybe just break it up into a few more paragraphs, but other than that it looks awesome. :)

Answer 12

I did.. But this doesn't show it....

Answer 13

How to break which paragraph into more paragraphs?

Answer 14

Oh, okay. Nevermind. Just maybe put an extra blank line (whatever that's called) in between each paragraph, so it's easier to read.

Answer 15

1) This looks like a jumbled up essay I cant read this all the words are all over the place add paragraphs and indentions

Answer 16

It won't let me... Can I email you it?

Answer 17

why dont you make it on a google doc?

Answer 18

I can!! But I'm on my tablet..... I can email it to right away!

Answer 19

um....im not giving my email thats weird but i suggest you add the paragraphs everything else looks fine

Answer 20

I'll try it now!

Answer 21

On my it idents slightly for the paragraphs if you can see.

Answer 22

its awesome! very descriptive, and its nearly perfect!!

Answer 23

How can I improve it to be perfect..

Answer 24

I'm trying to edit it in google.docx
so check it in the link that I sent you : https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_Fx0EHQgNYbZE8HCFsIig1iRFfnrLPgkxbty6yo3S7s/edit?usp=sharing

I believe we already worked on this one before, so I only edited the introduction part because that's what you're asking me to do O.o
But anyway, just check all the comments I put there and it's up to you whether you want to accept the change or not (:

Answer 25

wow so cool

Answer 26

@hattie12 your essay looks really good. Nice job.