Question

HOW DO I REWRITE THIS I dont like how the first line sounds, doesn't sound very educated

"In this paper I will be discussing if the government is giving enough attention to the people who are homeless in regards to access to primary health care through a critical analysis of security, employment, and community care centers"

Answer 1

"In this paper I will be discussing the government.

If the government is giving enough attention to the people who are homeless in regards, and to access the primary health care through a critical analysis source of security, employment, unemployment and community care centers."

Answer 2

Does that sound good?

Answer 3

I dont like this line "in this paper I will be discussing if the government is giving enough attention to the people who are homeless" Its to long

Answer 4

idk how to reword that to make it shorter

Answer 5

In this paper, I will be discussing whether the government gives adequate attention to the homeless population.

Answer 6

thank youu