Question

Feedback on my poems

Answer 1

A heart like a dark and empty soul

And only hate can feel that hole.

A rose that's blood red

You'd use the thorns to make yourself dead



Don't give up

Don't die

I know I couldn't be there

But you don't know why



I know the pain is beyon crazy

And I know right now you possibly hate me

Just know I was never away

I love you baby girl don't leave just stay



The tears keep falling

And my eyes keep bawlin

I hate to say good bye

But you should know why



It is my fault

No matter what people say

It's killing me baby girl

I feel your pain okay?



It makes my world shatter.

We both feel like our lives dont matter

We're both at the end of a rope

But promise me something baby girl

Promise me you won't let go.



For my bestie

Answer 2

It...needs more....heart

Answer 3

All I'm reading is words from your "poem" I'd prefer to see what I'm reading, If you catch my drift....make me vision the pain...

Answer 4

@Reni_Love_ELA

Answer 5

Okay thanks :)

Answer 6

No problem.