Question

Will you review my descriptive essay?

Answer 1

Everyday it is something new, but it is always the same thing. Never moves but it grows. It changes the temperature
like a feeling. It is full of life but it cannot speak. Instead it grows hair that is short and green. When the time has
come and winter has settled it become a dull short yellow. The white car holder smeared like a smudge from a paint
brush runs across the way. This is the spot where the children always chose to play. The summer makes it warm,
brushing across their feet. The children don't want to come in because outside feels like a treat. Sometimes in the
spring before it is to hot the dandelions grow and the cold does not. They lean toward the white from the heat it
reflects but before long, their wishes are picked.

From here I can see many others of the same kind. With their own children playing and the wind skipping behind.
I can see many, not just one or two, but not all have children like ours do. Though we are separate and spread apart
they are all hugged by the same giant spark. The spark glistened over the entire city, as a matter of fact the whole
world; but from here it felt special, like it was a personal fire especially twirled. After long hours the spark tries to
sleep. It hides under each mountain peak. This I don't fear because while its away, there is natures nightlight to
guide the way. When it is near june and the nightlight shines, so does the light show peaking from the vines. Tiny
little creatures that are always there, make their first aperance off and on floating through the air.

In winter, in summer, in fall, and in spring, this yard is my favorite thing. From the puffs of fluffy smoke floating
through air to the tears they shed when I am not there. The wind howling through my ear and the way it blows my
hair. Without this place where would I go this is why I love it so. Its a place to daydream and a place to smile and
so today Ill be out there a while.

Answer 2

Looks good.

Answer 3

Okay. he never asked it to be a poem so if that doesn't affect my grade then I was thinking it should be fine.