Question

Poem that i wrote....

Answer 1

i think im goin crazy
cuz somethings just not right
im falling for you baby
more and more each night

i never thought that this could happen
to me over you
but now i will believe it
cuz thats what i want true

we've always known each other
in the good and the bad
you've always been there for me
when im happy and when sad

i never thought i'd fall for you
i never thought i'd feel this way
you were my best friend
but theres somethin i gotts say

i think i like you
more than ever
i think i want you more

i wanna love
and hold you tight
and never let you go

i wish i would have told you sooner
before she came along
but i guess i'll just wait
or watch you slip away

i hate that i love you
i hate that we're so close
i hate that i think more of you
i hate the way it hurts

Answer 2

Awesome job! Very moving poem:)

I just think that in this stanza:

we've always known each other
in the good and the bad
you've always been there for me
when im happy and when sad

I'd fix it to keep consistency (repetition for clarity and effectiveness!)

so i'd get this (i put CAPS for what i added):

we've always known each other
in the good and IN the bad
you've always been there for me
when im happy and when IM sad

of course, follow what you want to do! :) but that's what I would suggest. Really great lines; I enjoyed reading this:)

Answer 3

Okay, thanks for the advice :)

Answer 4

ok

Answer 5

Ok

Answer 6

i love it

Answer 7

thnx :)

Answer 8

it's great ; )

Answer 9

thnk ya

Answer 10

damn thts good i like tht one

Answer 11

haha thnx