Question

Poem....I'm experimenting with a new style, so please comment.

Answer 1

Swept off my feet
At first sight,
I did everything
That you wanted.
We danced and
We played and
We frolicked around;
Then you got
Distant and cold.
Then you left,
And my heart,
My heart broke.
You came back
And my heart,
It became whole.
I was happy.
You left again,
And I was
Sad, not broken.
You didn't return.
I moved on.
I later learned
That you were
Playing with me
And my heart.
You needed me
More that I
Really needed you.
You thought that
It was a game,
But that's okay.
You can have
Your petty games;
I'm not playing anymore.

Answer 2

I've seen a lot of poems here on Openstudy written like this, so I thought that I'd try one of my own...

Answer 3

B E A UTIFUL

Answer 4

thanks

Answer 5

np np =P

Answer 6

elecrifying :)

Answer 7

thank you, Austin316

Answer 8

really liked it i think it would be better as a monologue though

Answer 9

hmm, cool idea. Thanks :)

Answer 10

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Answer 11

Nice. One error. Sixth line from the last. Should be 'than' instead of 'that.'

Answer 12

Thanks, jugatuba, I didn't see that until now.

Answer 13

@RAINIAR how do I do that?

Answer 14

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Answer 15

Okay, cool. I don't have time to do it tonight, but I'll try to remember to do it in the morning.

Answer 16

Cool :)

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NITE ^_^

Answer 17

that's good