Question

I wrote this a while ago but would like feedback if you have a minute to spare, thanks :)

poem in the comments

Answer 1

She's tired of living day after day in a skin that isn't hers
She feigns a smile for a little while but her eyes, they start to burn
Maybe she’ll stop trying, maybe she’ll stop crying
When will she stop lying?

She turns to the only thing that she knows will save her night
She checks into the Music Hotel, breathing in the neon lights
The bellman greets her and grabs her bags, says what’s the deal tonight?
Her eyebrows furrow as she whispers
The days haven’t been so bright

She goes into a room and injects notes into her arm
Music starts dancing through her veins
She closes her eyes and surrenders
Mr. DJ I’m lost
Please play my favourite song

He rocks her boat and sends her tumbling
Down down down down down
Mr. DJ please don’t hurt me
I’m trying not to drown

She’s falling asleep to Mr. DJ’s secrets
She finally feels free
Nothing hurts her anymore
Music did this to me

The sunrise scorches the tired earth
She wipes the sleep from her eyes
It’s time to check out of the Music Hotel
Mr. DJ, say your goodbyes

She’s weary but she’s stronger
She now knows where to go
The Music Hotel will welcome her
Any time she needs a home

Answer 2

Wow kinda confusing at first but that is great

Answer 3

Thanks @Ravenn it was inspired by the song Magic Power by Triumph

Answer 4

cool I might check it out @zzelinski