Question

poem for critic. If u read it and dont like it please tell me! i see all these people reading it but not responding so please comment and let me know what u think because thats the only way i can be a better writer is honest feedback

Answer 1

Secrets draw us like their muse.
So we come up with an excuse
To pose.
…and were somehow proud,
That no one found out.
And yet it’s killing us on the inside.
But you’re so well buried
That no one guesses the truth.

The girl of manipulation,
She lies to herself.
That’s why the world never knew.
Because she couldn’t even tell herself the
Truth.

Until now…and finally I feel free.
Like nothings tugging on my hair,
Telling me that hidden is fair.
Because the basement is where I lie
But I’m coming out and it’s true.
The light shining on my face
Because the truth is this could never be
Erased.

Answer 2

@demonchild99 @MakaylaTracy

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@ilovefood @ilovewolf @britanyashton @~*Ashtyn*~ @Crissy15 @redridinghood @geneticrockhopper247 @southmini @kittycat123

Answer 4

@paki

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@greencat

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@party_girl @chainedecho

Answer 7

waoooo nice... liked <3 @ispike

Answer 8

Thank u @paki

Answer 9

I love it more please make more <3

Answer 10

@party_girl thanks

Answer 11

@chainedecho lol trust me i will and thanks. If u (and this goes for anyone) ever want to read more im on wattpad idk if u have one but i have literally hundreds of poems on wattpad. My username is NotingSociety

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@aayushi.somani

Answer 13

@SyedMohammed98

Answer 14

awesome

Answer 15

thanks @danish071996

Answer 16

this is a cool one duh! I really appriciate it :)

Answer 17

@aayushi.somani haha thanks

Answer 18

@cupcakerain

Answer 19

@rvc @RAINIAR

Answer 20

@crazycountrygirl

Answer 21

@kittycat123

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@quickstudent

Answer 23

@MilenaSaeger

Answer 24

its really great. good job... and continue writing

Answer 25

@MilenaSaeger thanks

Answer 26

@serenacox

Answer 27

this is my fav out of them all

Answer 28

@serenacox lol thanks

Answer 29

@PyroYolka @chmvijay

Answer 30

Very Well Written! ☆☆☆☆☆

Answer 31

@Reni_Love_ELA

Answer 32

@PyroYolka thank u

Answer 33

hey very nice ! lots of meaning in those lines ! definitely came from heart with so nice feelings!
i liked this especially
The girl of manipulation,
She lies to herself.
That’s why the world never knew.
Because she couldn’t even tell herself the
Truth.
All the best for the next .......:)

Answer 34

@chmvijay thank u so much and im glad that something stuck out to u

Answer 35

@Ashleyrh1999 @Ravenn

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@fallenangelorchid

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@horsegirl27

Answer 38

That is a really cool poem. I like it good job!

Answer 39

@horsegirl27 thanks

Answer 40

@autumnm

Answer 41

its amazing

Answer 42

@autumnm lol thanks

Answer 43

XD

Answer 44

@ispike That's AWESOME !!! I love the VICTORY in the end :)
Us YOUTHS off of OpenStudy started a blog for young people to post MEANINGFUL Lyrics, Poems, and Opinions, like yours, and we would LOVE to have your MEANINGFUL Poem in OUR YOUTH WORLD TAKEOVER !!!

This is the link to share your Amazing piece of Art through the YOUTH Blog and you can check out some of the other words fellow Youths have posted too :D http://rainiarock.weebly.com/send-us-your-stuff.html

Answer 45

Awesome!!

Answer 46

tbh
Writing is a very beautiful way of expressing thoughts
and i must say that u r doing it well @ispike
all have talents
just need to shine them

Answer 47

@rvc omg thank u when i read tbh i started preparing for the worst so thank u

Answer 48

@rainiar thank u i will definitely take a look at it

Answer 49

lol @ispike u r doing well

Answer 50

sweet :)

Answer 51

@rvc lol yea im fine why do u ask

Answer 52

My username on wattpad is xXxForgottenWolfxXx if you want to check my work out. :)