Day by day, We all grow cold and grey
As the nights pass, We all realize love will never last
Happiness is but a false shadow cast apon a lonely grave
As we search for love and forgiveness
All we find is death and brokenness
Tears are for the broken not the defeated...

Question

Day by day, We all grow cold and grey
As the nights pass, We all realize love will never last
Happiness is but a false shadow cast apon a lonely grave
As we search for love and forgiveness 
All we find is death and brokenness  
Tears are for the broken not the defeated...

librarian · Answer

I got bored and wrote about what was on my mind... I found out that the person I was with was cheating on me and lied about it. - Libby

thesmartone · Answer

That is a well writtten poem :)

librarian · Answer

Thanx @TheSmartOne - Libby

anonymous · Answer

i really liked it i can defiantly feel the emotion and i loved how it was just dropped at the end where youre sitting like what the hack. Nice job i would however and in some more punctuation also the word brokenness doesnt really flow with the rest of the poem. Other than those two things it was amazing great job keep up the good work.

P.S poetry is about the writer and the writter only so if u think its perfect than its perfect.

librarian · Answer

Thank you for the advice @ispike I love it ^_^

librarian · Answer

@I_Always_Smiling I wrote about Noah -_- what you think? - Libby

anonymous · Answer

Yea no problem any time i know i love it when people critic me (in a nice way of course) so i try to do the same for others because all it does is make us better writers.

anonymous · Answer

@Librarian Wow.. I.. It's amazing.. I wish I could help.. I'm so sorry.. If I may say, he never deserved such a guy, my darling.. I love you, always remember that.

librarian · Answer

Awe thanks @I_Always_Smiling "hugs" I still cannot understand where I went wrong...

- Libby

anonymous · Answer

Anytime @Librarian And honestly, I can't either.. Somewhere I went wrong too.. We just have to look past all of it and know that life does go on...

crissy15 · Answer

you didn't do anything wrong josh, just he didn't know that what he was holding in his hands was something really valuable and rare, nothing can be compared to it <3 love you bro, and that poems emotional, and right :)

anonymous · Answer

Really good... I have gon through this before. @Librarian

librarian · Answer

Awe thanks @Crissy15

librarian · Answer

Thanks @Heypips How did you get through it? - Libby

anonymous · Answer

IDK   i just did    i guess i got tired of thinking about it