Question

Will someone critic my rap?

Answer 1

wheres it at

Answer 2

im getting it just a sec

Answer 3

Please help me Yah
i feel so alone
im just a kid i cant take this on my own
i cried si many tears
yea writing this song
tryna get it right where do i belong?
you never know if you never try
tryna put it in a song
but its all just a lie
a story i cant buy
time is passing
it just aint right
tryna be strong and put up a fight
but all isnt well in my town
im feeling down just movin around
and i need some help but no ones there
please tell me Yah tell me you care
maybe someones out there thatll pull me through
please tell me yah
will it be you?
please tell me
help me
why do i cry
why do i lie
why do i always let out big ol sighs
please tell me why do i have all of these whys?

Answer 4

tell me is this who im supposed tyo be
i used to be care free
but now im not that chance is shot
i guess now is the time to change
and be a little strange.......thats all so far

Answer 5

its really good!

Answer 6

thanks @Baby_Bear69

Answer 7

I love it!

Answer 8

:D thanks!

Answer 9

OMG I HEARD THIS BEFORE I LOVE IT!!!

Answer 10

Or something close! It's awesome!

Answer 11

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g3Rf5qDuq7M

Answer 12

Pretty close right?

Answer 13

Not exactly but similar

Answer 14

Great job!

Answer 15

love it really good

Answer 16

@horsegirl27 oh i used their first verses but the rest is mine and thank you

Answer 17

@Megan30400 shanks

Answer 18

thanks @I_Always_Smiling

Answer 19

np

Answer 20

:)

Answer 21

Creative! I like the way you changed them slightly! Good job!

Answer 22

haha thanks again @horsegirl27

Answer 23

your welcome :)

Answer 24

great song!! :)

Answer 25

thanks @damien

Answer 26

Very nice! would ove to see it finished! :)

Answer 27

thanks @spyro517 im working on it