Question

can someone give me feedback on my poem?

Answer 1

Tired
Why did she do it?
Everyone asks. No one has an answer.
It's too late to ask her.
No one cared before.Why now?
But I might have an answer:
She was tired.
Not the type of tired you can sleep off.
But tired of the pain.
Tired of loneliness.
Tired of being unseen.
Tired of having no one care.
However, now she is gone.
What she didn't know is:
I knew how much she hurt.
I knew how lonely she was,
But was pushed aside everytime I tried to approach her.
I saw her.
What makes me regret that I didn't try harder
To approach her, was that she left,
Not knowing that i cared.

Answer 2

I wrote this about suicide...it happens so often that it seems no one cares

Answer 3

great poem @Heypips

Answer 4

@koolkat13 Thanks
@Ravenn thanks i am going to try to post up more poems every wednesdays they are original don't think i stole them...

Answer 5

Very beautiful poem, and very meaningful. Good job!! :-)

Answer 6

Wow this is great! sad so many people end there life's at such young ages

Answer 7

This really touched me because I, as well as many of my friends, have had suicidal thoughts. It's a beautiful and meaningful poem. I love it deeply. Keep up the great work.

Answer 8

i love it! I'm actually writing a research paper on Suicide :)

Answer 9

@trinitybagwell. Thanks hope it kinda helps
@~SierraBozarth~ thanks and yeah ive had those thoughts before too