Hey there guys! I have a few different poems I have written, so if you could give me some feedback on them that'd be great, Thanks!

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zyi6 · Answer

First, a haiku:
 Life, is just a game,				
And if you make no mistakes,
You're playing it wrong.

zyi6 · Answer

Then, a free verse poem:

				The snow is coming,				
				And it brings joy,				
				Except for him,				
				This small little boy,				
				Who can't seem to know,			
				About this snow,				
				For he lives in a land,				
				Without any snow,				
				Florida.

zyi6 · Answer

@Keygrover , could you give me some feedback?

nobrainiachere · Answer

O.O 

Better than anything i could do.......

k_lynn · Answer

Great job!  I like the second one.

zyi6 · Answer

Hey guys! thanks for the feedback! If you want, you can head on over to the writing section of this site, and check out a horror story i am writing! Here's the link: http://openstudy.com/study#/updates/54f9c751e4b0da5705922105

anonymous · Answer

Awesome creative job! (:

anonymous · Answer

its awesome

zyi6 · Answer

Thanks! be sure to follow the link to the writing section, and read a short horror story I am writing, thanks!

anonymous · Answer

Will do! (: @Zyi6

horsegirl27 · Answer

It's an awesome horror story