Can some one read my book/what i have so far. And give me Constructive Criticism??

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anonymous · Answer

@jeffB77

anonymous · Answer

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anonymous · Answer

I am not done yet. This is from my book. I have not written everything but as i told @jeffB77 This is a preview.

anonymous · Answer

In pdf

anonymous · Answer

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KONMKQjgSjFuuV04H0mJmisMMfGopPvkLfxfQkXLSzE/edit?usp=sharing btw... This is NOT my email. So please dont annoy my sister if you find her email

anonymous · Answer

@k12andstudyislandhelp gosh, that's depressing, but amazing!

anonymous · Answer

Thank you. @TwilightRain1

anonymous · Answer

@iGreen @ganeshie8 What do yall think?? @undeadknight26

anonymous · Answer

@bohotness @Love_Ranaa @King.Void.

love_ranaa · Answer

Change the sentence that says 

"Just because her she married her fiancé"

But I like it. It's like a whodunnit mystery..and veryyy interesting :)

anonymous · Answer

Thanks @Love_Ranaa, @Kyanthedoodle what do you think?

anonymous · Answer

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anonymous · Answer

I like it. But i kind of dont get why there are chapters and days. Are they two stories in one???

anonymous · Answer

Thanks @Answer_with_a_Aplus No, they are not two stories in one. The days are written in her diary. Then the chapters are her life. You would see it different if it was written in a book, because then it would look like a diary.

fallenangelorchid · Answer

I love the introduction to it all, the hook in this narrative was very thrilling and it hit exactly what you were hoping for; "A mystery." Good job.

anonymous · Answer

Thanks @fallenangelorchid It is called A mystery because i didnt get a name yet. But Thanks anyway.

yanasidlinskiy · Answer

Oh, wow! That's really nice, but yet depressing as has been said above. "Fingers bleed"
Aww;)

geneticrockhopper247 · Answer

Am I detecting some traces of character insanity? :) If you continue, please either post here or post the link to it because I would love to read more.

anonymous · Answer

Thanks. @YanaSidlinskiy and @eneticrockhopper247 And i plan on finishing it soon.

yanasidlinskiy · Answer

You're Welcome! Yes. You should finish it :)