Can you check my thesis and give me some tips to make it better please?
Here it is:
The differences between the essays “Faux Friendship” and “Let’s Really Be Friends” is striking, therefore by comparing and contrasting the two writings their most important points are portrayed to reduce confusion and give the reader an in-depth look to both sides of Internet intimacy.

I'm not sure it makes any since...

Question

Can you check my thesis and give me some tips to make it better please?
Here it is:
The differences between the essays “Faux Friendship” and “Let’s Really Be Friends” is striking, therefore by comparing and contrasting the two writings their most important points are portrayed to reduce confusion and give the reader an in-depth look to both sides of Internet intimacy.

I'm not sure it makes any since...