Question

comment how my research is?

Answer 1

Quite a bit of grammatical errors, but overall it's good. You seem to understand what goes where in each section.
However, you're still not citing your references in your paper for your photos and giving credit (in the future, not doing so can get you into a lot of trouble, since these are not YOUR PHOTOS). Although you state this is your research, unless they are taken with your camera, you cannot use without credit.

Since most of this information looks like historical facts, you still need to site them in your writing.

Answer 2

@abb0t thanks for ur guidlines

Answer 3

can u say one example how to express in my own writings? @abbo0t

Answer 4

@abb0t

Answer 5

"The Late Heavy Bombardment (abbreviated LHB and also
known as the lunar cataclysm) is a hypothetical event thought to
have occurred approximately 4.1 to 3.8 billion years ago"

You can change that to Late Heavy bombardment (LHB), also known as lunar cataclysm, is a hypothetical event which is thought to have occurred approximately 3.8-4.1 billion years ago.

Also:
"The proof of comets contain water
is ‘Deep Impact’ was a NASA space probe launched from Cape
Canaveral Air Force Station on January 12, 2005."

Where did this come from? You may want to cite where you got that information from.
You have your references, you can put maybe. It's also a little hard to understand what you mean here. Maybe you can fix it to:

"The contents of water in comets was found by a research projected launched by NASA at the Cape Canaveral Air Force Station in January 2005 (Schopf-2002)"

the (Schopf-2002) signifies that this was taken from that reference at the end. Which as an example, i used ur reference 19.
You included a lot of references, so you also need to show where in your writing it is found.

Answer 6

nice.

Answer 7

@Awolflover1 why did u block me?