tell me what you think, and be totally honest!! i wrote this for a jerk that i still kinda love.... oops

i ignored you once
and it drove you insane
the idea that i was ok without you
that i didn't need you
it ignited you
setting off explosives
a full fledged infantry attack
i had to retreat
and hide behind my walls of safety
when i emerged again
you were invisible
but everywhere
in hidden land mines
it only took one wrong step
and you swooped down
hulking vulture
your soldiers pillaged my land
taking the valuables
and reducing the rest to
splintered boards and ashes
and you taught me
what ha

Question

tell me what you think, and be totally honest!! i wrote this for a jerk that i still kinda love.... oops

i ignored you once
and it drove you insane
the idea that i was ok without you
that i didn't need you
it ignited you 
setting off explosives
a full fledged infantry attack
i had to retreat
and hide behind my walls of safety
when i emerged again
you were invisible
but everywhere
in hidden land mines
it only took one wrong step
and you swooped down
hulking vulture
your soldiers pillaged my land
taking the valuables
and reducing the rest to
splintered boards and ashes
and you taught me
what ha

anonymous · Answer

what happens to deserters
as you forced an atomic bomb
down my throat
then threw me out
waiting for the explosion

elonasushchik · Answer

I LAV IT @jessmitz

geneticrockhopper247 · Answer

That's an interesting metaphor that you have going on through the story. I like it. :)

poetryprincess · Answer

I love it. Very powerful and full of emotion!

baby_bear69 · Answer

I LOVE it!!

redeemed1312 · Answer

Lol okay, just wanted to ask. ANyways its really good! I hope to see more of your work. :)

anonymous · Answer

thanks!

anonymous · Answer

Sounds like your a writer

anonymous · Answer

Wow i really luv it! An i can totally understand you still loving a total jerk lol yea i'm in the same situation =)