Question

Poem Guys!!! You know the deal: Read, comments, honest critiques!!!

Answer 1

I Don't Care

I broke up with him.
But he shot first.
My friend asked me:
Are you okay?
I answered:
Yeah. I don't care, anyway.
I don't care that he made me smile,
The first time we talked.
I don't care that our first date,
Was only a walk.
I don't care about his secy grin.
I don't care about his gleaming eyes.
I don't care that he can make me laugh,
At times when I can't even smile.

A tear escaped me eye,
I tried brushing it off.
My friend laughed and said,
"Sure you don't."

My truth is:
I DON'T CARE!!!

Answer 2

Sexy* on line 11

Answer 3

Good but try twisting the story a little like this(imma use your poem)

A tear escaped me eye,
I tried brushing it off.
My friend laughed and said,
"Sure you don't."

I broke up with him.
But he shot first.
My friend asked me:
Are you okay?
I answered:
Yeah. I don't care, anyway.
I don't care that he made me smile,
The first time we talked.
I don't care that our first date,
Was only a walk.
I don't care about his sexy grin.
I don't care about his gleaming eyes.
I don't care that he can make me laugh,
At times when I can't even smile.

I tell everyone im okay
"it doesnt matter"
but inside
i know

I care more and more eveyday

Answer 4

@Heypips

Answer 5

The thing is... I guess... I can relate but tried not to admit it!!! I wrote this based on experience... :(