Question

criticism?

Answer 1

they told me
to get everything out
to write every thought
onto this blank sheet of white
so i could be fixed

so much empty space
just waiting to be filled
so i did

i wrote about my spiraling worries
and i wrote about the
disgusting things hidden inside me

i wrote about the things
that i cant seem to understand
and i wrote about the memories
i refuse to remember

i wrote every thought
until my paper turned black
but i'm still broken

Answer 2

Its good I really like it!!! But it kinda ended quick and very blunt. Maybe spice it up a little next time ^_^ Still love it though!!

Answer 3

LIke it, but like @LeilaJudeh said, you ended it too quickly... I write poetry too... and I suggest that if you want to make it short, also put in some other words and give it a little more imagery. I mean I really like it, but make it either a little longer. Or just add some more details... love it though @jessmitz

Answer 4

Maybe you could list some other things you wrote. The ending is perfect, but I think that there needs to be more stuff in the middle, if that makes any sense. Two problems does not a broken person make.

Answer 5

thanks for the feedback guys, it means a lot!