Question

@Soniatonia

Answer 1

so what was it you needed help with?

Answer 2

my short story paper is kind of due monday and the ending of it is terrible

Answer 3

K, tell me what it's about and I'll fix it up for you. Characters, setting, mood, everything

Answer 4

Kk, it's about two girls named Holly and Claire who start out to hate each only to find out that they were best friends in kindergartener *they didn't remember each other btw*. Claire has to move back to California and the mood is sad and the setting is outside in the rain. It has to be detailed

Answer 5

No problem ^^

Answer 6

Claire had a blank look of sadness upon her face as she loaded the last box into the back of her father's truck. Holly stood there, letting the rain drench in her hair and mourn over her best friend too. She didn't want Claire to leave, not after what they built together. Holly could feel the tears stinging her eyes and making her feel out of breath.
Claire went over to Holly and clasped a cold hand onto her shoulder for comfort.
"Don't cry, Holly" Claire smiled sadly, letting her own salt torrents fall on her wet cheeks.
Holly nodded sadly, sniffing and holding herself to keep warm. The rain was pouring like miles and the wind soared freely in grace, blowing both the girl's hair in that direction of freedom.
Holly took one last look at Claire, who looked pale with despair but hope. "Well...this is it" Holly blurt out, letting a sob escape her. She felt comforting hands wrap around her neck and pull her against a rising and falling chest. Holly stood there, dumbfounded and blinking wordlessly before wrapping her own arms around the young girl that was about to leave her.
"Goodbye Holly" Claire's warmth repelled, the cold drifting back quickly. Holly slowly nodded.
"Goodbye Claire"


Add to it if you want and if you want, you can add Claire's truck driving off and Holly standing there crying, but this is pretty good itself :)

Answer 7

Wow...you are good. It's detailed and perfect! ty! my life is literally saved!

Answer 8

no prob