Question

havent wrote in a while but heres a poem please critic

Answer 1

I feel like I’m running in circles,
Trying to find some peace,
But just ending in the same exact place.
Over and over again.
History repeats itself
And I’m just another puppet.
To be spun until I puke.
Dancing like a hypocrite
But I’ve always been misused.
Tired of being deaf
And sick of being blind.
I’m just another exit in your mind
But I feel more like a door knob.
Twisted and turned,
Manipulated for abuse.
Pushed and pulled.
Damage, misused…

Answer 2

I'm way too tired to offer actual critique, but I do really like this.
What's cool about this is that it can really apply to almost anything. Any relationship, any feeling, etc.

Answer 3

I love the connection you made with the exit and the knob. Personally, I think that was brilliant.

Answer 4

I can relate to how you feel Certain days of my life. This is a beautiful poem. But you should dig deeper and show your inner truth. Good luck

Answer 5

this is very well written and even though you didn't really elaborate on every detail you have a gift some poets don't have. you can write very few words and make it touch the hearts of many because even though it is not spelled out it is easy to understand what point you are trying to get across. very deep and emotional! great job! keep writing!

Answer 6

@leahhhmorgannn lol thank you so much

Answer 7

@geneticrockhopper247 thank you as always

Answer 8

@haley_hamptom youre the second person who has said that to me which means working on my inner truth is something i do need to work on thank you

Answer 9

@demonickittenlover thanks so much

Answer 10

welcome

Answer 11

One word, and one word only... AMAZING!

Answer 12

@BonnieB. lol thanks

Answer 13

I truly loved the whole thing!

Answer 14

@BonnieB. you r so sweet

Answer 15

i am actually really shocked with all of these comments..

Answer 16

*red cheeks showing*

Answer 17

you shouldn't be... It is really good!

Answer 18

Do you write just for fun?

Answer 19

I write fiction and poetry :)

Answer 20

yea but i want to make a career out of it. I defiantly want to be a novelist and hopefully a screenwriter, but i also want to write plays or musical. You know be on Broadway without actually being on Broadway. I'm kinda obsessed with broadway. Its a dream at least.

Answer 21

@BonnieB. and thats really cool i love poetry and i love writing fiction

Answer 22

Write now, in this very moment I feel like... EVERYTHING IS AWESOME!

Answer 23

u mean like write a poem

Answer 24

In my description, I posted a short story I wrote a long time ago. You can read it if you want... :)

Answer 25

yea i defiantly will

Answer 26

Gotta go... :( Tell me what you think later :)

Answer 27

okay will do

Answer 28

@BonnieB. u cant find it can u tag me in it

Answer 29

I'll text u better

Answer 30

amzing like omg thats outstanding the best i ever read it explains how i feel like the best in the world i absoutley loved it

Answer 31

amazing

Answer 32

@ahvei lol wow thanks

Answer 33

oh anytime just keep up the amazign work its just excellent @ispike

Answer 34

@ahvei will do