Question

criticism please?

Answer 1

i keep hoping things will work out
and we can be together
but its like hoping to find silence in the middle of new york city
or waiting for the sun to go dark at noon

this crazy idea i keep holding out on
that you still want me
its as sane as thinking i can breathe underwater
or run a marathon on jupiter

this ridiculous belief i cant diminish
that you will ever take me back
its as plausible as elephants flying
or the earth to stop spinning

im not stupid
i know how impossible all of it is
but i just cant seem to convince myself to accept that

Answer 2

wow real deep i like that you have to find more about where you are coming from as a reader nice job i really like that

Answer 3

this is incredible!!! Like absolutely speechless. I like how there's no punctuation but maybe slow it down a bit in the end. Other then that its flawless. You r very talented

Answer 4

Good Job!

Answer 5

i like that you have to find more about where you are coming from as a reader nice job i really like that

Answer 6

I find it easier to read long works better when all grammar is proper, such as capitalization.

Answer 7

i dont like capitalization @GreenCat
it's my personal style. lol

Answer 8

:P