Question

i wrote a two paragraph thing. Please critic give me notes, ideas, thoughts, input, anything

Answer 1

I thought I would be this person that made a difference, and I’m not saying that I’m not going to; what I’m saying is I’m not there yet. Right now I just feel like a clover in the middle of the desert; lucky, the only thing green, but covered by sand and too small to notice. Every day I can feel my fourth leaf tear a little bit more. They say finding a four leaf clover is about impossible, and yet kids still go looking for this magical clover with the extra leaf. It’s incredible. This gets me thinking that maybe were all born with that extra leaf. The problem is that when we’re looking, were looking up at the people we admire, parents, teachers, but never each other because we all look the same. Children have that fourth leaf and never notice it because they’re looking at everything but themselves, and adults…well adults no longer have a fourth leaf. It was taken apart, ripped, shattered, and basically destroyed by each other, by society in general. I’m seventeen and I like to believe that I’m still a four leaf clover. Maybe I taped my leaf back on or maybe it’s dangling and about to fall off, but I still believe in dreams. I still believe that I can make a difference in the world, so if I have to stitch myself back together a few times in order to get there, I will. The effort of trying seems a lot a better then the effort of perfection.
Perfection is the voice society gives us. One I’ve listened to before. I’ve listened to that voice more times than I can count and the truth is that they’ll probably be more times in the future. But that doesn’t mean I have to give into this idea. Perfection can’t exist! It’s as mythical as a unicorn (jk unicorns are total real, but you get the point). So stop telling each other to strive for perfection, stop telling people that practice makes perfect, because all that does is create insecurities and false hopes. Each and every one of us has a chance. We can all make a difference. We all have a voice. We all have a talent. Believe it or not but were all unique, and that’s okay. Our uniqueness shall be the cause of the difference I make…the difference that all of us make.

Answer 2

@ahvei @jessmitz @bohotness @chmvijay @chainedecho @fallenangelorchid @HWBUSTER00 @k_lynn @leahhhmorgannn

Answer 3

Lol this is a total instagram worthy message !!! I love your writing. I wish other people though like you ! I can totally agree with your message. I LOVED IT ! Great writer.

Answer 4

Okay thanks. I'm trying to get a non fiction book together called noting society which is basically a bunch of notes about my perspective on things

Answer 5

yep tell me when you do because I will be buying it on Amazon .......This makes my day better and have a better view on the world . Your inspiring !

Answer 6

@HWBUSTER00 omg i'm so glad

Answer 7

I love it! I totally feel the same and this spoke to me!

Answer 8

@jessmitz thank you so much I'm glad

Answer 9

Wow, I just don't know what to say.

Answer 10

You are so talented, you write so well, I just love this!!!

Answer 11

@horsegirl27 lol thank you so much im glad you enjoyed it

Answer 12

@southmini @TheSmartOne

Answer 13

lol you're welcome

Answer 14

@mathman101 @BrentsGirl4ever @nikinoo

Answer 15

This is very interesting and inspiring for me to read. I love to read and write and I believe this is something I could see myself reading for hours upon hours. It flows incredibly well, which is hard to do when it's "basically a bunch of notes about your perspective on things." It's interesting to see this side of people. I encourage you to continue pursuing this field if that is what comes out of just your thought process. I believe you could make a name for yourself.

Answer 16

You are so talented, you write so well, I just love this

Answer 17

@niknoo thank you so much

Answer 18

@nikinoo

Answer 19

@DatChinookGuy thank you