Question

I need this paragraph revised and edited please and thank you!!!!!

Answer 1

In the book All Quiet on the Western Front many soldiers didn’t know that World War I ended until after many of them died (Baez, Ivone). In War Horse the men were told that the war was coming to an end that day and that the bells would ring for the first time in four years (Baez, Ivone). Many men in the book didn’t like the enemies, so when they got to their sites when they were fighting they would steal their food (Baez, Ivone). However, in War Horse, two soldiers on completely different sides helped each other to cut Joey out of the barbed wire (Baez, Ivone). They even did a coin toss to see who got to keep the horse (Baez, Ivone). Both the main characters in the movie and the book lost good friends that they cared about (Baez, Ivone). All the soldiers had to live in trenches and learn to survive (Baez, Ivone). In All Quiet on the Western Front many of the main characters didn’t live but in War Horse a good amount of the main characters lived (Baez, Ivone). One thing that they had in common was that they all had hardships in the war and they were basically trying to keep themselves and each other alive (Baez, Ivone). In both the movie and the book I noticed that they talked about the rats (Goode, Tyler).

Answer 2

@luto3636 @EclipsedStar

Answer 3

Is this your work that you want revised or is this your assignment?

Answer 4

In the book All Quiet on the Western Front many soldiers didn’t know that World War I ended until after many of them died (Baez, Ivone). In War Horse the men were told that the war was coming to an end that day and that the bells would ring for the first time in four years (Baez, Ivone). Many men in the book didn’t like the enemies, so when they got to their sites when they were fighting they would steal their food (Baez, Ivone). However, in War Horse, two soldiers on completely different sides helped each other to cut Joey out of the barbed wire (Baez, Ivone). They even did a coin toss to see who got to keep the horse (Baez, Ivone). Both the main characters in the movie and the book lost good friends that they cared about (Baez, Ivone). All the soldiers had to live in trenches and learn to survive (Baez, Ivone). In All Quiet on the Western Front many of the main characters didn’t live but in War Horse a good amount of the main characters lived (Baez, Ivone). One thing that they had in common was that they all had hardships in the war and they were trying to keep themselves and each other alive (Baez, Ivone). In both the movie and the book I noticed that they talked about the rats (Goode, Tyler).

I removed an adverb, but otherwise, everything here is good!

Answer 5

The removal of the adverb is optional, jut fyi

Answer 6

If this is your work being revised then we are plagarising.

Answer 7

@EclipsedStar I believe it's only plagiarism if you deliberately steal the author's work without their permission.

Answer 8

*not your work

Answer 9

Forgot the "not"

Answer 10

@EclipsedStar & @CaiteyJameson1007 The things in my essay are citations (Goode, Tyler). if I didn't include that in my paper then it would be plagiarism, but since I did include them then it's not plagiarism, because I cited my sources in my essay/paper