Question

a poem
~im done~

Answer 1

i cant take much more pain
i cant look you in the face again
i dont want to try anymore
not with how many days you left me sore
you hit my face
and left me in a hopeless place
you cut my wrists
and beat me with your fists
you never loved me
you wanted to own me
i didnt do what you asked
and the next hit came so fast
it broke a rib and then my nose
on my grave you will leave a rose
for the time you wanted to have me
but i just couldnt let it be...

Answer 2

@DominantVampire @logan420 @timo86m @Wolfboy

Answer 3

very impressive.

Answer 4

thank you it means alot that you think so

Answer 5

Really good!

Answer 6

i love it

Answer 7

thanks :3

Answer 8

what was on your mind, when you wrote this.

Answer 9

my ex

Answer 10

i see.

Answer 11

hm. I dont know what you are looking for, I do agree, this is alright work and I can see you have put feeling. But I do not know if you want my opinion on things that could be changed or things of that sort since the topic is sensitive

Answer 12

i just wanted your feedback on how to improve it