Question

Poem Sorry for spamming with poems

I wish you were
here to hold my hand
I wish i could call you mine
But your with another girl
But you need to realize
I am hurting inside
I need you here to cuddle
with to be my shoulder
to cry on
I need you hear for all
my life

Answer 1

This is really beautiful.

Answer 2

@sugarplum15 Thanks also loved your poem very much

Answer 3

Thanks. @AmberAlexis

Answer 4

its a very short and sweet poem very beautiful and sad. However there are a few issues. Number one is grammatical. Now i know all about poetic licenses but i just thought that this was just a common mistake. Your is used incorrectly it should be You're. Not a huge mistake but big enough. The other one was hear and I'm only mentioning this because of your, your mistake. If not for that i wouldn't question hear at all and think it was poetic licensees. If its not poetic licences its an easy fix. If it is i absolutely love it! I think that one word gives it more depth. As for the actual writing its not so cliche that im clenching but this is an extremely cliche topic and putting the same thing in a different way can be difficult.

Answer 5

@ispike Well thanks number 1 i was rushing and number 2 i cannot write very well

Answer 6

number 2 is obviously incorrect. You're a very good writer and there's no point in getting down on yourself. No first draft is perfect. No first draft is good. So stop being harsh on yourself because youre your own worst enemy

Answer 7

@ispike Number 2 isn't incorrect

Answer 8

I get i can write a good poem but i mean that i cannot like spell

Answer 9

u can deal with that though. Use the internet, spell check. There's so many tool to help with that. i am extremely dyslexic sooooo i cant spell either. Thats nothing to be ashamed of or get down on yourself. Spelling is a tiny part of the writing process so dont sweat is