Question

feedback on my song please. here is a song i have to write for history class.

Answer 1

blood shed that would leave a stain
drip drop, its the pouring rain
dead bodies everywhere
man they must of been scared
hear the gunshots coming near
deep inside you feel the fear
here it is world war one
beginning of the war has just begun (2X)

It was a cold and windy night
people had to tell their family goodbye
they were chosen to go to war
it’ll be the same no more
war was voted against Serbia
by Austria-Hungary in europe
Allied was our side and central was theirs
the “great war” it was declared

blood shed that would leave a stain
drip drop, its the pouring rain
dead bodies everywhere
man they must of been scared
hear the gunshots coming near
deep inside you feel the fear
here it is world war one
beginning of the war has just begun(2X)

bombs and poisonous gases from plains
all you hear is crying of pain
guns and tanks and people dying
all around you can hear them crying
Wilson promised to keep us out of war to be safe
but changed his mind when allied needed help from the states

Answer 2

im not done with it yet....

Answer 3

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Answer 4

i love it just like i love all the others im so glad u decided to keep writing songs ur amazing at it so dont let ppl bring u down and say u cant just remember u can :D

Answer 5

its a song about world war one. im not fully done...

Answer 6

I love the song but its kind of discriptive for school

Answer 7

i had to write it this way lol. i need more ideas for the last verse tho...

Answer 8

im not gonna take u ruing my life! eave me alone and get of please

Answer 9

you done too much to me, and thats y i left, not BACK OFF!

Answer 10

now*

Answer 11

Hi there, @jonrooks! Please be respectful to other fellow users. Please read the CoC here: http://openstudy.com/code-of-conduct

@teresar7 I like it! It is a bit descriptive, but I know that that cannot be avoided (after all, it is a historical script). Great job! I like the rhyming.

Answer 12

thank you so much! it means alot

Answer 13

your really good! ^~^

Answer 14

thanks!

Answer 15

i thought that it was really good you should write another one

Answer 16

thanks...

Answer 17

@TheSadGirl

Answer 18

ya this is her

Answer 19

who r u? @TheSadGirl

Answer 20

@Leafy

Answer 21

?

Answer 22

exactly

Answer 23

where do i know u from @Leafy

Answer 24

@HunnyBunny6969 idk if u can c him on here or not

Answer 25

i can only see one!

Answer 26

c one of what?

Answer 27

nun of your business

Answer 28

someone is being a grouch!

Answer 29

=D

Answer 30

No I dont like you

Answer 31

No i just dont like people who dis on my friends music

Answer 32

she sucks at writing music. when i had her, she was good.

Answer 33

NO she still is good go away

Answer 34

nah. i made her who she is. she knows the truth. just ask her.

Answer 35

BYE BYE FELICA