Question

Can someone please proofread what I have so far? I need to fix the thesis statement I have and create a conclusion. (500-700 words; third person objective view)

Answer 1

My assignment says this for the thesis statement -- It should included your subjective definition of the topic (your focus) as well as include a preview of the two areas you will use for development of your two body paragraphs.

Answer 2

hey can you check out my song?

Answer 3

Umm sure

Answer 4

it looks good

Answer 5

very women impowering

Answer 6

Thank you.. But I need my thesis fixed and a conclusion :/

Answer 7

cool

Answer 8

so any advice other than what you said about my song

Answer 9

I dont know much about songs