Question

is this ok for a poetry contest

Answer 1

shameful secrets
this is not a personification just simply what i feel from anger hurt and betrayal to not even knowing if what i feel is real you see every sense of defence every sheild as an example i peeled back while mt enemies stabbed me in the back do you feel that cuz i fear that rejection shame broken hearts and queer traps that you never see coming for the only aid you have is a clear map no indication of where to go just a clear map that shows all you've done guilt shame and then some disabling you from looking back for again you fear that see love is the equivalent of strapping yourself back to back with the one you love against a train of people's opinions and the hurts of your past if you stay together youll walk away alive and unscathed but usually one unstraps theirself leaving the other alone to take the blast. you lie there in pain wising you died in the wreck thinking nothing would ever be the same because they took a piece of your heart when they left but before you go insane thinking how you could've changed the past you find someone who helps you forget the pain of the past tie yourselves together on those same tracks hoping it wont end in pain like the last

Answer 2

feed back plz

Answer 3

@audiiii @AngelaReneeColeman @Babynini @catlover5920 @Lady.Liv1776 @Love_Ranaa

Answer 4

sorry for the mass tag i just need feed back

Answer 5

Yes! This is really good!

Answer 6

thanks

Answer 7

do u think its sounds too hurt if you know what i mean

Answer 8

hrm It's difficult to read because there are no pauses or indents or punctuation. Is that on purpose?

Answer 9

love it like always