Question

poem critic honest feed back please

Answer 1

I am afraid of the light as much as I am the dark.
People seem to be so scared of the middle,
That they go from one extreme to the next.
No one likes in between.
But isn’t it all in between.
I mean, good and evil is just a matter of perception.
A concreate ideal created by the hypocrites of the world.
But who’s to say what’s good is actually good?
Good and evil persists of the idea of perfection,
And let’s be honest perfection can’t exist.
Because perfection is seen in a numerous number of ways.
So many that contradicts each other.
Who’s right?
And who’s to say that they’re right?
…maybe we’re all wrong.
Maybe there is no good or evil.
There’s just people and opinions,
Voices.
Which is why we need to stop worrying about concepts
That only making us hypocrites!
Use your voice, better the world
But don’t try to perfect it,
Because that’ a battle we will all lose.

Answer 2

This is beautiful!! :)

Answer 3

@sugarplum15 thanks i wasnt quite sure if i wanted to make it an article or a poem but i think i made the right decision by making it a poem

Answer 4

Yeah. :)

Answer 5

i love it!

Answer 6

@teresar7 lol i think you say that every time haha. Thanks

Answer 7

well, it is really good! its better then i can do lol i love it!

Answer 8

No matter what you write, you always somehow amaze me with your writing. :D

Answer 9

lol every time i see ur piece of writing, i like it.

Answer 10

@rikkibracamonte1999 lol im so glad thank you so much

Answer 11

@teresar7 haha thanks

Answer 12

np anytime!

Answer 13

Wow this is very well written

Answer 14

@horsegirl27 thanks

Answer 15

yw

Answer 16

@chainedecho

Answer 17

nice :)

Answer 18

@rvc thanks

Answer 19

@ahvei @DominantVampire

Answer 20

indeed it is good.

Answer 21

@DominantVampire thanks

Answer 22

Thank you @ispike

Answer 23

@rvc for what

Answer 24

haha u said thank you
so Thank you :)

Answer 25

I really like this one!

Answer 26

I like it yea perfection doesn't exist, if it did my mom would've demanded it everyday lol

Answer 27

@Slacker thanks

Answer 28

@Crissy15 glad you liked it

Answer 29

@inowalst @HWBUSTER00 @demonickittenlover @ZaneMarcs

Answer 30

Honestly, I am philosophically torn on this poem. Artistically, I love it. However, I vacillate between the support of definitive right and wrong for the pure fact that moral relativism merely doesn't work, and the overarching concept that pure right isn't possible, so why bother. So, I like it, I'm just not 100% sure that I agree with it.

Answer 31

amazing i love it

Answer 32

@MAkaylabvb so glad

Answer 33

@ispike its amazing comming from a wrighter i love it you could turn it in to a song

Answer 34

@MAkaylabvb yea if only i could write music

Answer 35

@ispike you can just fallow your heart and dont think

Answer 36

@MAkaylabvb i can write lyrics but a song will just sit in the dark if you dont know how to write music. I want to learn i can read it a bit but i still have to learn to write

Answer 37

@demonchild99 @kittycat123

Answer 38

@ispike ok well im looking for a lyric wrighter for my band if your intrested message me its a metalcore/alternative rock/emo band

Answer 39

@MAkaylabvb I'm more into broadway music and slightly pop than rock

Answer 40

lol...amazing ispike

Answer 41

i dont think it would be a good fit but thanks for the offer

Answer 42

@demonchild99 thanks

Answer 43

@ispike ok well if you ever want to you can allways message me :)

Answer 44

@MAkaylabvb thanks

Answer 45

@ispike its still good

Answer 46

Woah. I like.
Two small things:
1) on the fifth line don't forget a question mark
" But isn’t it all in between."
should be: " But isn’t it all in between?"

2) On the last line you forgot an s
"Because that’ a battle we will all lose."
should be: "Because that’s a battle we will all lose."

This is the first time I don't have anything to say besides punctuation and a small edit! Well done, i'm a tough grader :)

Answer 47

@babynini thanks i will fix that

Answer 48

this is a great poem!

Answer 49

One word... Amazing! :P

Answer 50

@ladyjay26 thanks

Answer 51

@studybuggtori thanks

Answer 52

@ispike No problem! Feel free to tag me in anymore poems you post!