Question

Can you help me edit my French essay? I'm really focused on word placement and tense.

Answer 1

@Vincent-Lyon.Fr

Answer 2

Will you?

Answer 3

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Answer 4

@Vincent-Lyon.Fr

Answer 5

It's pretty good. There are some sentences that I do not understand (last 2 sentences of your first screen print).

In the second screen print, you must use passé composé anytime somehing is mentioned with a date, not imparfait. eg: Marie Braquemont a commencé à....

Can you make the changes and copy your text to the Open Study box below?

Answer 6

oh, okay. thanks. I always get confused when to use l'imparfait and passé composé

Answer 7

the last two sentences are supposed to say that before he was an impressionist painter, he wanted to be a history painter. then, he became a classical painter of modern life.

Answer 8

I guess they don't even make sense in English XD I don't even know what I tried to say.. or why

Answer 9

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Answer 10

You should write:
Avant d'être un impressionniste (we do not use "peintre impressionniste", "impressionniste" is enough), il voulait être un peintre historique, mais il est devenu un peintre de la vie moderne. (do not add "classique" which refers to another artistic period).
"mais" is better than "puis" because it contradicts his initial inclination.

Answer 11

ah, that makes sense.

Answer 12

wait, I don't need to conjugate être?

Answer 13

(the first time it's used)

Answer 14

If you say : "she showed her paintings ... at such and such exhibition", it is also dated, so you have to use passé composé too.

You are mistaking those two contructions:
Avant de + infinitif
Avant que + sujet + verbe conjugué

The first one is easier and always used when the subject of the infinitive is the same as the subject of the main sentence.

Answer 15

oh, okay.

Answer 16

and what about the sentence about her husband? does that need to be passé composé because there's a date at then end?

Answer 17

oh, and thanks for your help

Answer 18

You should write:

Son mari n'aimait pas sa profession, alors elle a cessé de peindre jusqu'en 1890.

Answer 19

what's jusqu'en?

Answer 20

and is this right? I don't think it is: http://prntscr.com/7d3g6k

Answer 21

"jusqu'en 1890" is "until 1890"

Answer 22

"parce que" introduces a clause, not a noun.
For a noun, you must use "à cause de"
Beside peinture is feminine, so it should be "sa peinture" but, for a great artist, you rather use "tableau" than "peinture".
You should use the French title of the painting too.

So I would write :
J'adore aussi Edgar Degas à cause de son tableau Danseuses bleues, mais j'adore Claude Monet encore plus.

Answer 23

I couldn't find the french title, I looked everywhere XD thanks, but I already turned it in. THANK YOU SO MUCH