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One of the positive effects are a world where heading to the grocery store is three miles or thirty minutes away by foot. The need for improved transportation was in demand. For example The urban housewife of 1925 who could do well without a car was transformed into the suburban housewife of 1960 who required a car to do all her shopping or to pick up the kids after schools. This was some of the bonuses of having a car.

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One of the positive effects are a world where heading to the grocery store is three miles or thirty minutes away by foot. The need for improved transportation was in demand. For example  The urban housewife of 1925 who could do well without a car was transformed into the suburban housewife of 1960 who required a car to do all her shopping or to pick up the kids after schools. This was some of the bonuses of having a car.

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'' For example , the'' ''1960, '' and begin with, Some bonuses of having a car were that, the positive  and keep the rest :)

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